Treatment 2 - Behind close doors 23/09/12

After the feeedback that me and karis recieved about our previous treatment,we then decided that we should move on to produce a new treatment with a completly new idea.

We have accomplsihed dicussing our opinions during the weekend using facebook.We used facebook as a benefit to share our ideas and actually present our made up treatments in which we both improved.

The images below present print screens of the communication of me and karis on facebook.
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Karis managed to produce a treatment ,in which she had sent me about a young boy who has a dream of becoming the best football player,it then presents the intention where the boy has an eating disorder.The print screen presents karis's treeatment however,in my own spare time i have made a few changes in whihc i believe seemed very interesting. (print screen)

Treatment

Sam is a 13 year old boy who lives a normal life and appears to be happy and healthy. However, as the film progresses we see he is put under a lot of pressure to be perfect in different aspects of his life, such as being the best football player in the world, he is considered to be a show off in which annoys everyone in their inner self, from every polite comments their Colleague appears a word in which they say in their own thought (harsh words appearing).He becomes noticeably more stressed and irritable as the film reaches its end – at which point the viewer would probably put his behaviour down to being a typical teenager. The twist in the end of the plot would be that Sam comes home and as soon he is about to take a sip of his soup, he has a sudden flashback in which presents him vomiting and munching down food continuously. After the flashback presents him about to open a container in which says speed considering that he takes drugs in order to accomplish his football dream.


 

Treatment 1 - chatterbox 17/09/12

 

As me and karis developed our story ideas, we then began to produce our first treatment. This is considered to be a practical, since we will gather feedbacks and improvement that is need to be completed.

 Premise-

A young girl who is lonely and allows a chatterbox to make decisions for her

Treatment

Emma is a girl who at the age of 13 has already become jaded with her mundane everyday life. One word comes to her mind if she ever needs to describe herself; average. She has always wished she could be one of those girls she sees walking through the hallways at school with groups of friends around them, all laughing at a joke she isn't a part of. Ever since she can remember she has always felt like a supporting character in her own life, never quite able to step out from the background into the spotlight. She doesn't even blame her classmates for leaving her out because she knows the only thing holding her back is herself. She just can't seem to get over feeling shy all the time. She would even settle for one friend, but instead only has her pet hamster, Henry, for company. One Friday night which, as usual, she spends talking to Henry and watching any documentary she can find, Henry suddenly leads her to a genius idea. As a pet, Henry never needs to decide anything for himself. Just as Henry relies solely on Emma to provide food, shelter and activities – why couldn't she to put her fate somewhere other than her own hands too? She has always had a keen analytical mind, so it makes sense for her to rely on something solid and concrete. Like probability! That way she could give herself a list of reactions to possible situations and let chance decide what she did next. After all, why would she need to be shy when she isn’t the one making the decisions in the first place? So it was decided, and armed with her list and a coordinated chatterbox, she faces everyday problems with a new solution. She feels confident and free. But she can't quite shake the feeling that by not having any input into her actions, she is doing herself more harm than good

 

 

Feedback

After producing our first treatment, felt the experience of how treatment does take a long process to reach the final decisions, I understand how a treatment is basically a concept of how accurate it must be and also very simplistic to show a creative presentation to an audience. Me and my partner karis then shared our treatment within our colleagues to receive full feedback and review.

 

Our colleague mentioned that our creativity was a great idea to include a prop such as the chatterbox. However it seemed that it could consider a very difficult process of actually shooting their scenes in which seemed very long and complicated. They liked the concept where the girl leads her life by using a chatterbox and allowing it to provide social decisions, which is something that has never been used and does represent a new interesting idea.

The main general idea about the teenage girl having mental problems or being lonely is presumed to be a bit clichéd. Therefore I also agree with the terms and will be taking this feedback as a record to analyse, where we can improve our practical treatment into its higher standards.Im going to think and develop more ideas outside the box and understand the concept of how a film really interests the audience with creativity used. This will lead to a lot of research through short films and also need to focus on how we can execute the timing of the treatment, considering that it mustn’t be too long or too short to actually shoot the treatment.

 Even though this is considered to be our first practical treatment, it was a very good atte3mot and also and easier step towards building our experience of producing an effective treatment. I understand how it can lead to many problems, in which needs to be solved and improved to make it seem more interesting to engage our audience. Therefore I believe that me and my partner needs to still cooperate efficiently in order accomplish our goals for our A2 project.

 

 

Treatment Practise 1 - smiley tears 18/09/12

Jill is a young, shy and timid teenage girl who is a student of Joseph elementary school. She always has the intention of being more independent and not able to interact with everyone in her school, therefore she is known as a loner.

 

The scene begins with a depressing tone of piano music presenting Jill multiple of shots of Jill dressing, eating and getting ready to school as she leaves her house, to visit her school. She feels very depressed and scared of visiting her school, she is very humble as she travels by using the bus, she doesn’t give any eye contact to anyone, adults seemed very concerned about her because of her humbleness, and she only keeps her head down and stays silent.

 

As she reaches her destination which is near her school, she then travels by walking by herself without interacting with any teenagers, instead it presents her point of view as she walks past with every teenager that glares at her as she walked past them and keeps her head down as usual. She only looks up for a split second then quickly looks down.

 

She attends to her next lesson sitting down on a table to her self keeping her hands and objects very close to her. We are then presented with a group of young girls who are sitting the opposite table all together and whispering to each other. The group of young girls are gossiping and also giggling which suddenly single words starts to appear and begins to tease Jill in many actions such as shoving her pencil case and also pulling her chair, it then constantly teases Jill in many other actions.

 

The school bell rings as it symbolise that it is lunch time for the school students. Jill is walking by herself yet again in corridors which presents a point of view of her seeing the group of young girls all starring at her and continuing to gossip. The gossip then begins to increase with such as high tone of music and the abusive words begins to appear. As they appear the words abuses Jill in abusive and violent format by pushing her to the wall, tripping her over constantly. The cuts a scene begins to increase as words are being dashed at her at a fast paced until she receives her limit of where she actually runs.

 

As she runs the group of girls are laughing until one member shouts out for the girl by screaming ‘I hope you  ’ The word appears as a point of view chasing the young girl as she runs and then finally tags her until she turns around and gets run over.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Watching short films 17/09/12

Gone goodbye





The short film was very interesting the way the voice over covers the whole scenes of the man driving through a long rainforest.It presents how he is fading away from his past by traveling.I also liked the background music in which suited the scene as very depressing and also mathced with the tone of the voice over.The setting of the short film seem very fantasy like and just a great area to present a scene of someone who has lost someone that was close to them.The scene presented an empty feeling for the man.

The story provided me to have the intention to know where the man was going to,of course the first part that i really wanted to questionned is what is going?

The character seem very humble and depressed however i really like the way he has the regret of all the past he shared with his close one because it represent him as very caring and also thoughtful.I liked the way the person visited to an unkown empty area to relax and to free their mind from any stress.

The cinematography in the short film was fantastic the way thre first portion attracted the audience to seek more refuge of where the film leads to at the end.The camera angle was very effective at the beggining showing as birds eye view.The way they used the presentation of the balloon to symbolise the mans wife was very effective especially the way the balloon popped actually provdided me a surprise and also presents how her wife is basicvally vanished.The most important technique i liked was when the baloon popped the letter that the man was covering the voice over was actually the dialogue that he first spoke over with.
　
　
　
　
The elevator









The short film was absolutley hilarious,just amazing of how they put a basic story into a great short comedy.The film was very funny of how the situation was constantly getting worse.The elevator music was just hilarious of how every floor it stopped the music starts,which just creates an annoying mood for the man who is waiting in the elevator.It provides some sympathy for the poor man who is tapped in a serious situation where he may of died because of the weight capactity of the elevator.However you then realise that he is very paranoid and actually manages to escape a serious situation but yet again gets involved with the worse of all.

Overall the story attracted me with their presentation of comedy,in which provides you the intention of how does the man escapes the situation and how does he feel being in that situation consider that its very hilarious of people react if they were in that particular incident.

the character seemed very moody and also paranoid,what i liked was the paranoia that he had of actually calculating the weight capacity of the elevator.The man is very generous of actually keeping his harsh comments to himself but manages to escape but still has the patience while entering the elevator full of swine flu.

The cinematography of the short film seemed very basic but was used in a more complex way of representing comdey.The camera shots was basic but very effeicent at use and also the editing of presenting the fat man as a massive danger was very hilarious.Therefore the short film manage to present a person in an elevator but adding a situation in which could happen however with the additional aspect of comedy.

Initial ideas plus 17/09/12

After developing my story ideas with my partner karis, we then further proceeded to the next step of our idea development and began to summarise our film.

Our story idea is about a girl who is young,idependent,bizare and also a victim of being bullied at school.She is considered to be weird because she uses a chatterbox to decide what she does in her social life.The story begins with a voice over explaining her background image presenting her as very lonley and also very thoughtful.As she constanly uses the chatterbox by listing the things that comes to her mind ,she allows the chatterbox to randomise her own decision for her.As we know she gets bullied at school everytime she makes the chatterbox to provide a decision for her.Therefore the chatterbox provides a decision to confront the bully to overcome her shyness and also to accomplish being very confident and true to her innerself.
　
The story types that our intial ideas belong to is the rites of passage Rob reneir like of a story in which a character recongnises their next age of their life and attempts to learn what they need to know and also accomplish their weakness.  

initial idea plus on Prezi

Feedback

I have manage to recieve various of feedback from a collegue to ask some questiopns about my story idea and also to confirm their interest about my story idea.They asked me of what type of story would it reffer to as i explained above it belongs to the rites of passage.Apart from that the story seemed very interesting because of the way the chatterbox is something new that is used to present someones character as being awkward and weird.I also explained to the collegue of how i would visiualise my film and also what type of editing i would use,therefore i showed an advert that provided me a suitable idea of how i would consider my film to look.

Initial ideas

From our wacky stories that we have chosen and researched over the summer holidays, I shared my wacky stories with my partner karis and summarised the main concept of each story.

I have noted down the summary of karis’s wacky stories and gathered the genres that her stories are related to.

 

Karis’s stories include:

 

• Involvement of bullying (corruption)
• Thriller combined with comedy
• Involving with multiples of emotions

After we identified the genres and themes that belongs to our wacky stories we then

produced a mind map, to gather ideas of various of themes that both of our stories have some similarities.

Initial Ideas on Prezi

 

Our mind map made us realise that we did have some similarities in our wacky stories and also provided us a great idea of noting down how we visualise our film.

We further proceeded by categorising our interests and then discussed small aspects of various films that we desire to include.

Finally we then shared our ideas with the other groups and finally discussed of what type of story suited for our ideas, in which we gathered many names but only chosen one which is called Smiley tears.

 

 

Summer work - interesting objects

Over the summer holidays I have been collecting objects that relates to the category of my own memory/history

 

This seemed very interesting to me because I usually enjoy thinking about my past of all the good activities and enjoyment I had in my life and also believe that history is a great presentation of someone’s background image. History can effect peoples emotions of how they miss their past.

 

 

Baby picture: Represent my own memory when I was a toddler and also represent how immature and all the great childhood memories I use to have

 

 

Game: Relates to the enjoyment i had in the past with friends,families and also myslef.Since i never had the chance to play games in my life its sometimes depressing since i have alot of schedule events therefore for myself it presents a depression for my innerself.

 

 

 

Topi: an object which I wear while praying (religion Islam)]

 

 

 

 

 

 

This represent the history off how I always preach my own religion since it’s a massive part of my inner self and i always think about the good deeds I've performed from thye past and also religious events that i always celebrate and perform such as Ramadan and eid.

 

 

 

 

Karate belt: Represents the activities I have performed for 5 years and also represent the history of how I developed my own knowledge of confidence and discipline.

 

 

 

Education: The image presents the books that I use to study from primary and secondary school in which provided me an interesting flashback of how education was so simple until education became very complex as my knowledge began to enhance.

 

 

 

 

The two image presents my old GCSE english class in brampton manor in which holds the memory of  the friends and teachers that I used to communicate and interact with back in secondary school and I usually miss the relationship I had with them.

 

Overall the reason why I have collected items that relates to the category of history/memory is because its presentation is very popular in many opening sequence of films presenting the main characters history of how they were born and developed to their present stage. History always comes in mixture of other genres such as conflict, tragedy, love ect. In my opinion history is an interesting element that everyone desires to think about in their lives and always wish to go back in time and feel the enjoyment they had in previous years therefore history has always become a magnificent and emotional category that has an effect on everyone.